“Reducing Word Length” Page 79, # 9, The directions are to replace long words with shorter words. The word given was “initially.” I would replace it with “first.”
“Reducing Word Length” Page 79, #6, The directions are to replace long words with shorter words. The word given was “endeavor.” I would replace it with “attempt.”
“Reducing Sentence Length” Page 79, #5, The directions are to shorten sentences by being concise. The sentence says “If there are any questions that you might have, please feel free to contact me by phone.” I would write “Feel free to call me with any questions.”
“Reducing Sentence Length” Page 79, #2, The directions are to shorten sentences by being concise. The sentence says “I wonder if you would be so kind as to answer a few questions about your proposal.” I would write “Please answer a few questions about your proposal.”
“Using the Active Voice Versus the Passive Voice” Page 78, #1, The directions are to rewrite the sentences using the active voice. The sentence was originally “Implementation of this procedure is to be carried out by the Accounting Department.” I would change it to say “Implementation of this procedure is being carried out by the Accounting Department.”
“Achieving Clarity” Page 78, #1, The directions are to replace vague statements with specific statements. The sentence says “We need this information as soon as possible.” I would rewrite it to “We need this information by 5pm today.”
“Reducing Word Length” Page 79, #6, The directions are to replace long words with shorter words. The word given was “endeavor.” I would replace it with “attempt.”
“Reducing Sentence Length” Page 79, #5, The directions are to shorten sentences by being concise. The sentence says “If there are any questions that you might have, please feel free to contact me by phone.” I would write “Feel free to call me with any questions.”
“Reducing Sentence Length” Page 79, #2, The directions are to shorten sentences by being concise. The sentence says “I wonder if you would be so kind as to answer a few questions about your proposal.” I would write “Please answer a few questions about your proposal.”
“Using the Active Voice Versus the Passive Voice” Page 78, #1, The directions are to rewrite the sentences using the active voice. The sentence was originally “Implementation of this procedure is to be carried out by the Accounting Department.” I would change it to say “Implementation of this procedure is being carried out by the Accounting Department.”
“Achieving Clarity” Page 78, #1, The directions are to replace vague statements with specific statements. The sentence says “We need this information as soon as possible.” I would rewrite it to “We need this information by 5pm today.”